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hey [Apr. 12th, 2006|09:51 pm]
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Hey I'm new to this community, and I really wanted to improve my grammar skills, but I'm horrible at correcting my grammar mistakes.
However, I edited this story like three times and I wanted you guys to see if there is any other mistakes I haven't seen or corrected.
Thanks I appreciate it very much

My short story:

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While I was stared out at the rain splashing the windows; I started to feel irresponsible for the constantly dripping tap. “Ma, why can’t you call the janitor to fix the tap?” I asked, “Oh never mind about that, its free good water, and at least it’s washing of the extra dirt and it’s faster. I don’t really need to put in a lot of energy into washing then” she said lazily. I then placed my cup beside the sink, which was loaded with dishes, “Ma, I’m going to take a shower” I yelled as I went into the bathroom. After the shower, I came back to look at the sink, but I still saw droplets trickling down from the tap. However, when I looked at my feet, I realized that I forgot to wear my slippers, “Oh no!” I pretended to shriek. I then ran out into the storming rain, where I felt every drop of water hitting my skin, but then I saw a head peering out a window yelling “ What in the Lord’s name are you doing out in the rain? You’re going to get sick, come in right now” she demanded. “No Ma, it’s free water, and at least it’s washing of the extra dirt and it’s faster. I don’t really need to put in a lot of energy into washing then” I said bitterly about my “dirty” feet.


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